It's indeed rather linear; three of the four chapters are "talk to the guy to find out who to talk to next". right now I have no idea how to fix, but I do like the underlying story, or what it could be, so it's worth fixing. Let's start with a few questions... Why does the Junta send a soldier for therapy and R&R to Europa? Don't they have specialized care facilities themselves? After all, Europa is quite a thorn in the Junta's side, insisting on being independent and all, and even succeeding in being so. Why *did* Chavez remember? That seems rather central to the story, but either I've read too fast, or you didn't explain it. Also, I think that a "What happened so far" section at the beginning of the document, with information like this, would help make it more accessible. After all, it's an adventure guide, not a short story. Stacks usually don't broadcast locater signals, they're small, inert crystal spheres. Does Mulligan use some kind of next generation stack? Incidents like what happens to him are why people have backups, after all. *How* does the Hansen owe anybody money on a scum barge? If he's Scum, he'd live communally, so at worst he could be called a slacker, a freeloader, or, more damning, an asshole, but he wouldn't have individual monetary debts; Maybe he wasted communal assets? If he wasn't scum, why would anybody lend him (communally owned) money? Why would Chavez hide? Willy agreed to shut up (and was under threat of keelhauling if he didn't, it appears), Hansen was gone and apparently not missing, why wouldn't Chavez just hang out in the open until body-swapping right before reaching Reagan? And how is the bodyguard involved in all o this? Why is he willing to waste a rather exotic morph, what was he told? Speaking of "nobody noticed it so far", half a gram of antimatter gets checked out of the system and nobody gets suspicious? Does nobody do sousveillance on that barge? Did the Scum who swapped with Chavez really think that he'd get to retire for being a hero? And that he'd enjoy live in the Junta, and wouldn't miss life on a barge? What's up with that guy? Are there no border controls between the barge and the stadium? How can someone with a Nagasaki bomb's worth of antimatter in their backpack enter a stadium with the pope? Does nobody watch their 511keV sensors? What was Chavez' motivation to blow up the pope? What was he hoping to achieve with that? Given his state of mind, it doesn't have to be a rational argument that he's following, but a kind-of-logical one would be nice. Speaking of which, I think that the story could be improved if the players were able to get their hands on a fork of Chavez just in time to figure out his motivation, which would provide them with sufficient information to talk him out of his attack, if they're socially clever. What'd make it especially thrilling would be a nuke-in-the-backpack-with-a-dead-man's-switch scenario, though again I don't quite see yet how he'd get that antimatter into the stadium in the first place. As far as getting a fork is concerned, seeing how the body swap was apparently performed by two people who aren't body bank techs, it's possible that they triggered automatic backups, or left copies in the ego bridges' caches.