Not sure if this goes here, but I got the hack pack, and the music files seem to be misnamed. Fury is actually Blight and Vice-versa. Firewall seems to be as advertised, but the Album art also seems to be mixed up.

[b]Page 42[/b], Secret Societies heading. "Firewall has plenty of secret societies. It’s a natural consequence when people [b]form friends[/b] using only false identities and encrypted communications." I think this should be changed to read either "form friendships" or "make friends". I've never heard anyone say they "form friends". [b]Page 62[/b], when discussing Erasure squads sent in on an op that Sentinels were already working on, half-way down the right column: "Some erasure squads do not work with sentinels, though, in order to enhance operational security. Many times, the router will request your help to accommodate the squad’s arrival. Don’t be offended if the squad only asks for you to get out of the way when they come in." I think this is a bit twisted up, and it would be better with the first sentence as the second of the three. "Many times, the router will request your help to accommodate the squad’s arrival. Some erasure squads do not work with sentinels, though, in order to enhance operational security. Don’t be offended if the squad only asks for you to get out of the way when they come in." [b]Page 90,[/b] Caches heading. "A subset of caches called are intended for use on a temporary basis to store items that need..." The space for a word has been left apparently blank, but my cursor highlights it like text. If this was meant to be redacted information in the book, inserting [Redacted] would be preferable. At present, it just looks like a layup goof. [b]Page 92[/b], Other Uses heading, mid-way down the bottom half of the page: "[b]On at least occasion,[/b] our filters have undermined the credibility of eyewitnesses by labeling them as obsessive [i]Breakout[/i] players confusing VR with reality." I think the word "one" is missing from the middle of the bolded bit. And I just realized it's bloody nine AM. Good night.

While not exactly a typo, I believe it should be mentioned that under Rokuzawa Chi's background on page 107 mentions her as "born male". Since referring to a baby as born male or female is slowly falling out of favor nowadays, I feel like in the time of EP they would at least use terms such as "assigned male at birth" instead.

Page 114 oligarchs "The same oligarch who is keeping a collection of alien WMDs as a momento mori may" it's memento mori not momento mori.

ORCACommander wrote:

they way it is written now implies the parents made a blind decision to not choose the sex of the child, the way you want to changed implies the parents chose the sex from the get go. Subtext is important.

This may need to be continued in another thread, but I do not see that subtext. Could you explain a little bit more how you understood it? If Chi's parents didn't choose a sex then why say she was "born male" at all? The subtext I see is one where bioconservative parents forced a gender role (male) that wasn't what Chi actually is (female). Maybe I'm only seeing the subtext because I am a trans woman. In most current gender theory it is understood people aren't born having a sex, but are assigned one by parents, doctors, and society. It's just that in a universe like EP's I found the terminology jarring and archaic. I feel like the creators and writers for EP have always wanted gender diversity in this game. This should be supported by using the most recent terminology when writing about gender.

Page 177 "Attachés are expert-system consultants used by Titanian intelligence groups (see Exsurgent Virus Detection, below), commonly assigned to ministers and diplomats." Should "...(see Exsurgent Virus Detection, below)..." be included? Or should it reference the Titanians part earlier?

Page 184, re: Ultimates: "Ultimate morphs are the norm." Should that be "Remade morphs are the norm."? Edit: page 182, my bad.

Some of these duplicate points already made by others. And some, I realise, are niggling pedantries. page 12: History, The First Schism: "Pragmat" should be "Pragmatists". Also, The First Schism occurs twice, the first time referencing pp.23 & 46 and the second time only p.23. One of those should perhaps refer to the Titanian Schism instead. page 13: Organisation, The Eye: "Togethe" should be "Together". Page 13: Firewall in Action, Field Ops: "to when the last ev" -- should perhaps be "Evacuates", but space is tight. Page 17: Machine Intelligence Directorate (MIND). "Republic of China" -- at present this refers to the island of Taiwan, as opposed to the People's Republic of China on the mainland. This might have changed between now and the Fall, of course, but Taiwan achieving its longstanding goal of reconquering the mainland seems a trifle unlikely and if unification went in the other direction I'd expect it to remain the People's Republic. Page 24: Things Firewall Doesn't Know. "What effect does gate travel has on the exsurgent virus?" -- change "has" to "have". Page 31: second column, near the bottom. "Noddle" -- should be "Noodle". Page 32: second column, near the bottom. "double-checking rep was properly bumped" -- perhaps it's quibbling, but I'd insert "that" after "double-checking". Page 38: New Recruit sidebar, near end. "Everything that server seems to do is so classified, it might as well be on another plane of existence" -- delete comma. Page 48: second column, one-third down. "worker's councils" -- should be "workers' councils". Unless the whole workforce is forked off one individual, I suppose. Page 49: second column, two-thirds down. "wield a heavily influence on Firewall policy" -- should either be "heavily influence Firewall policy" or just change to "heavy". though I'd usually describe influences as weak or strong, rather than light or heavy. Page 51: second column, very top. "pragmatist's" -- should be "pragmatists'". Page 51, second column, near bottom. "faster tan we probably should have" -- should be "than". Page 68: first column, near top. "Firewall's opposition against it" -- perhaps not strictly wrong, but awkward. "struggle against" is more idiomatic. Page 70: first column, near top. "croatoa" -- unclear what that is. possibly a reference to an early English colony in North America that unaccountably vanished, but that's a trifle obscure. If it (whatever it is) happens to be a proper noun, it should be capitalised. Page 70: first column, one-third down. "In the rarest instances, crows will designate the research being performed at an extrasolar facility too valuable to ignore and too dangerous to allow" -- would read better with an "as" (and perhaps a "both" as well) after "facility". Page 72: second column, near top. "ascribe to the philosophy" -- should be "subscribe". Page 72: second column, halfway through. "but telling them how to do their job" -- should be "by". Page 81: Operation Cloud Dragon. "This particular exhuman outfit has been awarded with a higher risk rating due to their stated desire in conquering certain transhuman habitats and using the residents as chattel". That's an awkward sentence that reads like an imperfect translation. Better to say "assigned a higher risk rating" (risk ratings aren't blue ribbons) and use "interest" rather than "desire" (which takes the preposition "to", but would have the knock-on effect of changing "conquering" to "conquer" and "using" to "use"). Page 81: Case Eldritch Ward. "... distribute many of their countermeasures out to non-Firewall groups ..." -- delete "out" as unnecessary. Page 81: Case Eldritch Ward. "This server is always interested to receive ...". Again, wrong proposition. Either switch "interested" to "eager" and leave the rest, or change to "interested in receiving". Page 82: Operation Fumigant. "exsurgent sleepers in position of authority" -- "positions". And I think "on Luna" rather than "upon Luna". Page 90: Firewall Spaces, Caches. "... subset of caches called are ...". Blank space. Missing "[REDACTED]", perhaps? Page 94: first column, top. "around it.." -- delete the redundant period. Pedantic little sod, ain't I? Page 101: first column, top. "members of the what would become Firewall" -- delete "the". Page 101: second column, bottom (& same issue once on next page). "his" appears twice, but if "Gelzer adheres to a non-binary third-gender identity", then the proper possessive would be "their". Page 114: apparent formatting error, "Planetary Consortium" sits at the bottom of the first column (partly occulding the text above) rather than the top of the second. Page 114: second column, bottom. "drafted up" -- "dreamed up". Page 115: apparent formatting error (knock-on from the page before?), "Titan" is at the bottom of the first column instead of the top of the second. Page 115: second column. as a proper noun (or adjective), "ultimate(s)" should be capitalised. Page 115: second column, bottom. "In their consideration". The verb would work just fine ("They consider Firewall a hobby club"), but the related noun is awkward. "Estimation", or perhaps "worldview" are better. Pages 116 & 117: seem to be swapped, at least if the picture is meant to line up. Page 129: "not a small amount paranoid". Awkward again. "little bit paranoid" is much more idiomatic. Page 153: "by the Kron Kartelye"[weird box-X symbol I'm not going to hunt through the ascii chart for]. Either delete that funny thing or replace it with whatever accented character it was meant to be. Page 164: second column, bottom. "such as Breakout (p.XX)" -- replace with proper page number, which I believe is 89. Page 168: first column, bottom. "though the Singularity Foundation is most suspect". Awkward, and remains so even if changed to "suspected". Perhaps best changed to "most suspect the Singularity Foundation". Page 168: second column, top. "... but who then aided them?". Odd word order, "but then who aided them?" is better. Page 168: second column, bottom. "... whomever created the TITANs ...". "Prometheans". And it's nitpicking, but I think the nominative "whoever" is correct, rather than the accusative "whomever". Page 168: second column, bottom. "transhumanity just isn't so lucky as to have survived the Fall without an ace in the hole". Jarringly awkward, not least in how to fix. "transhumanity didn't survive the Fall by luck; we had an ace in the hole" is neatest, but rather duplicates the function and structure of the following sentence. Page 170: first column, two-thirds down. "Realizing the stakes before transhumanity, Cassowary". Ambiguous. If, as seems likely, "before" is temporal (i.e. transhumanity did not realise the stakes until after Cassowary did so) then add "did" after "transhumanity". If "before" is not temporal but means something like "facing", then change to "facing" to remove the confusion. Page 170: first column, two-thirds down. remove that unaccented "e" from "protegees". Page 170: first column, two-thirds down. "They were never a codeline brother" -- perhaps it's quibbling, but if using the gender-neutral third person pronoun, then the neutral "sibling" is better than the masculine "brother". Page 179: second column, one-third down. "... believed to know too much about the Firewall's activities". Delete "the"; it's not strictly wrong but isn't used elsewhere. Page 189: Firewall Router. Language: Native English should be higher than 45. Regards, Cascade

:Multiple Locations: ASTURIAS to me seems like it is a proper noun of a person. perhaps should be ASTURIA'S or ASTURIAS'? EDIT: Case suicide dreams I think would be a better name for transhumanity wiping itself out do to no longer breeding and people loosing the will to resleeve.

Page 115: Reclaimers: "The most aggressive singularity seekers we work to eliminate or discredit." should not be singularity seekers but reclaimers

Also, at the risk of angering our glorious TITAN overlords, I'm disappointed that some of the people writing up the sample characters haven't learned from the lessons of the Mercurial Scavenger in the core rulebook. Any character that maintains Active Skills below 60, with the only good skills being Knowledge ones are utterly useless. Rely on your party to cover knowledge gaps among them, because unless the encyclopedia character can actually *do* something, their table time is wasted. And for the record, "succeeds half the time under ideal conditions" does not constitute a skilled character.

I am going to disagree with you FrivolousVector and ShadowDragon8685. I like the Mercurial Scavenger. It's very octopus like. Slow, stealthy, and capable of absolutely devastating ambushes. Also under ideal conditions anyone with a skill of 40+ will succeed because they have a +60 from modifiers (taking extra time, complementary skills, teamwork, tool bonuses, etc.).

FrivolousVector wrote:

...as long as you have access to the Mesh, all you need is the Research skill and you are able to duplicate nearly every knowledge skill.

Sort of. You can definitely look up basic facts. But advanced understanding and synthesizing knowledge requires the skill. There is a big difference after all between a person with a shelf full of science textbooks that they have never read and a professional scientist with a phd and 20+ years experience. Also knowing something about the subject you are researching is tremendously helpful in getting good results (in game terms this is the complementary skill bonus).

Was just about to suggest that. Lalande, are we going to your thread or mine? Back on the subject, there is a typo in the first character's Club skill. The morph bonus to SOM does not match the skill table's value. Suggested edits to the rest of the text will come as I get them.

Well the public Knows about the exsurgant virus but their memory of it is not the same as the truth of it. They think of the exsurgant virus as a dozen or more separate bio/nano/digital plagues unleashed by the titans themselves or the other nation states during the fall. the general public does not know this virus corrupted the titans nor do they know its extraterrestrial and sapient nature. Sunward the mention of exsurgant virus there was more for player and gm benefit than for the historical record. Most of the fluff in these books are written from an in character perspective.

Forgive my impertinence, but I was looking at the Suborning Swarm p175 (old printing, so if this changed, please ignore). ""disabling... is rather easy... make a Simple Test using the swarm's Hardware: Electronics skill of 40" ... So it's so easy that the task only succeeds 1/3 of the time? Why not cut out the middle man and make it a tool instead of an autosoft? It's really hard finding spimes and everything, which this swarm makes considerably easier. So instead of relying on an... unenviable skill level, the swarm actively seeks out relevant tech, and then it talks back to the owner so they can run their own Hardware tests. That way players have a good reason to invest in Hardware: Electronics, and those sleeved in Synths can rest a little easier knowing any attackers need Hardware: Robotics as well before their eyes get hacked.

So I noticed a couple things, scrolling back through the pregens. Titanian Science Inspector has Cosmic Anxiety Disorder, even though I'm pretty sure that's listed as an Async only Disorder, and she doesn't have the Psi Trait (sounds almost more like an Exsurgent Phobia anyway) Jovian Scientist has a level on his Allies trait, Allies doesn't use levels last time I checked. Nor, for that matter, does Immortality Blues as listed on the Hypercorp First Contact Specialist

@FrivolousVector - The free native language skill does not require the expert trait (unless you want to use CP to raise it. Maybe). [b]Firewall Scanner[/b] - Guardian Angel bots already have enhanced vision standard so the sniper configured bot doesn't need it (maybe replace with viewers?) - There seems to be a missing closing paranthese after the first guardian angel bot's list.

i didn't respond in that thread because i was of the same opinion as uwtartarus and thus redundant.

Redroverone wrote:

It sounds more like Exsurgent Technology, which should cover stuff like stuff....well, exsurgents create. You can't really call it Xenotech, because it's not made by aliens, but it's definitely not something transhumanity is able to do. That's a field worthy of study (and absolutely terrifying in the wrong hands)

So "TITAN tech" or just generally "Interest: TITANs" maybe?